Oh, I love this story. For mine, the attraction is that there's lots of plot. Yes, the witty dialogue is definitely part of it, but it's the whole package for me.

I really like what you did with expanding this chapter from the snippet - it's really clever, and now there's a whole new lauching point for the next part of the story. Oh, and the father, brother, Peter bit just dropped with a very big clang. Didn't really think about Morgan's father or brother. Wonderful, as always.