What Edmund did over his summer vacation

[rthstewart]

Blocks and general downer attitude notwithstanding, as I'd gone so far, I have finished and tied together the pieces previously posted here into a full update to Harold and Morgan:  Not a Romance.  Chapter 4 is here, and about half of it is old-ish (though edited) and about half is new content.  Please review if you are so inclined.  Feedback heavily drives this story.

Comments

[amine-eyes.livejournal.com]

AGH! I can't read it because I'll end up being heavily distracted and do no writing!

*wibbles a little*

Expect a review on September 2nd, cos I'll have no deadline stuff :D

(Hope all is well over your end btw :D)

[rthstewart.livejournal.com]

Thank you! Good luck with your writing!!

[autumnia]

I read, I laughed and I very much enjoyed it.

And I also left a review afterward. :-)

[rthstewart.livejournal.com]

Thank you! Some of that census did end up in the story! Of course, then I added the references to the Calormene Kama Sutra.

[the_rck]

I love Edmund and Morgan together. I'm hoping for happiness for them.

Thanks for posting! I really enjoyed the chapter.

[rthstewart.livejournal.com]

Thanks so much!

[min023.livejournal.com]

Yay, I came and read and left a (baddish) sort of review (for which, my apologies - my tech is being a pain in the butt. If it doesn't start behaving soon, I'm going to start explaining my pov with a hammer! : )

Anyway, I'm very thrilled to see the update.

Cheers

[rthstewart.livejournal.com]

Thanks so much! I soooo appreciate it! You have no idea how heartening it is, especially given the very, very, very, very slow response.

[varnafinde.livejournal.com]

I'll review it on ff later - I'll just say here that I loved it!

I was so pleased when you apologized for half of it being old material - then I knew that half of it would be new!!!

[rthstewart.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much! I hope you do RR when you get a chance, and yes, there's lots of new material there! Added context!!

[a-blue-jay.livejournal.com]

*awkward wave*

I left you an awkwardly phrased but rather long review on ff.net, except it turned out I wasn't signed in while I was doing it... so hi.
So yes. the review starting "Oh man! Harold and Morgan!" was me.
Hi!

[rthstewart.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much for weighing in! True to what happened in the final chapters of TQSiT, my review count per chapter on ff.net has dropped by over 50%. So my all sad that you mentioned in your review is not without reason. I'd thought maybe it was just something about TQSiT, but nope, it obviously cuts across both stories. The only thing that has saved this chapter from among the worse reviewed since I started posting in March 2009 is that I've had new and untitled reviewers such as yourself appear. So yes, I assume there is a message there somewhere and it's not what I had hoped for.

Your question about just what Jina was consulted on. Heh. I discuss this in the previous post or two from E. It is indeed, Natural Family Planning on the assumption that if canines can be taught to detect H1N1 virus in infected people and scenthounds have olfactory sensitivity something like ten to one hundred million times greater than a human, detecting the symptoms of ovulation are really not that hard. For a hound.

So thank you again. I'm very grateful.

[a-blue-jay.livejournal.com]

Privacy is really a foreign concept to Narnians, isn't it.

And while you might have less readers than you started with, there are still a lot of us! And I recommended you to my friend, and she's been reading! She probably hasn't finished yet, but you have at least one new reader.

I don't usually read things that quite so ...adult? and neither does my friend, but in your case, it's not pointless. It's an integral part of the whole. And you don't really have explicit descriptions. It's almost all implied, which makes it clever and classy and awesome.

Anyway, the people who are scared off are silly prudes, and unintelligent as well. Which still doesn't mean it'll be easy for you to lose them as readers, but ...

[rthstewart.livejournal.com]

And friended you back! And yes, the content is adult. I'm an adult, writing adult characters for a mostly adult audience. As far as I know, my readers who are still in high school is really small.

Thank you so much for giving it a try and for leaving a review. I am hugely grateful.