Eustace's infatuation with Mary hit me when I wrote them in the Museum together in AW. This is one where I think I've not done enough with Mary because in my head, she's very kind about it and I'm not sure readers would see her that way. It also underscores why in the actual story, a relationship between Peter and Mary would be such a really, REALLY bad thing -- Eustace is just one of the many potential victims. As I said, trial balloon -- I've been really interested in this AU stuff since these two characters have spent way more words together in the AU than in the story proper. Others have written more of Peter and Mary in the same scene than I have.

The trick with Peter and Susan's disagreement has always been to pull it off without Peter being pompous and without Susan being an idiot. The reaction here indicates that's an area that requires a lot more refinement. And Edmund... well, I'm not saying anything about that.

There's also... gosh, how to put this... I'm putting warts on canon characters. Over the multiverse/spin off/AU/TSG etc. etc. I think Peter has probably escaped the most unscathed, other than being really thick about what Aslan wants him to do. His desire to chart a clear moral path is evidenced in that last chapter with Susan in AW and he's not being judgmental, yet, but he's coming across pretty heavy handed. I think that's hard to read -- it's certainly hard to write.

And yes, you do need to get back to that last battle story! Hey! mini-big bang!? 10,000 words??? yes?