Chapter 18, Moles in the Garden, Part 2

[rthstewart]

Chapter 18 went up this evening, Moles in the Garden, Part 2.


I killed Guy.  I've actually killed off a number of OCs, but this is the first onscreen one.  Susan's entreaty to Guy that he tell Lambert that she IS coming, that she will see him again, is one of the oldest parts of this story.  So too was Tebbitt's gentle handling of Susan as she rinses away Guy's blood and begins to confuse Narnia and Spare Oom.  The lament and farewell were recent editions, with Edmund's lament for the Traitor something that came into being this week. 

A word about Edmund.  I have emphasized his Rat and Crow interest.  Further, he has been involved in the more "transactional" and "written" part of the whole Just thing -- treaties, laws, amendments, and so forth.  This is a significant part of what legal types do.  They do not all go to court and argue things as trial lawyers and barristers.  We have not yet seen this part of Edmund in my stories -- his province as adjudicator of the accused.  It's coming and here we see that just because I've not written it yet, doesn't mean it's not there and important.

Fleming, by the way, is Ian Fleming, who was part of the BSC and did have some really stupid ideas about crashing planes into the Channel in order to steal Enigma machines off of U-boats.  Fleming was originally going to be the one to figure out the Rat and Crow in Susan's last letter to Edmund.  I decided relatively recently to have the Colonel be the one who decides to take a look a her letter.  Tebbitt's disclosure of her odd rambling and insistence of writing to Edmund was also a relatively recent addition.

Oh, and Gillian?  Your review has created a Thing, now known as "mystically delicious."  It involves chocolate  You will notice the new icon in metonomia 's Live Journal.

Comments

[rthstewart.livejournal.com]

Thanks, Min. Tebbitt isn't dying here, obviously, and the end is near. So, if he figures things out, it won't be here. His perspective is different as he as always seen her as an adult and his understanding of the "mystery" has been more, frankly, sexually based. There is nothing remotely schoolgirl in her actions to and around him and he has responded as such. Unlike others (Richard, Asim, the Colonel, even Mary) Tebbitt has never knoewn Susan is anything but a 20+ year old woman and all the experiences do is reinforce that impression. I had tried to work in more confusion where he is telling mom about how Susan was talking about their Cook and dog and mom is all, 'what cook, what dog?' But, what made it into the chapter is enough.