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rthstewart) wrote2010-03-14 12:28 am
rthstewart) wrote2010-03-14 12:28 am
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Chapter 18, Moles in the Garden, Part 2
Chapter 18 went up this evening, Moles in the Garden, Part 2.
I killed Guy. I've actually killed off a number of OCs, but this is the first onscreen one. Susan's entreaty to Guy that he tell Lambert that she IS coming, that she will see him again, is one of the oldest parts of this story. So too was Tebbitt's gentle handling of Susan as she rinses away Guy's blood and begins to confuse Narnia and Spare Oom. The lament and farewell were recent editions, with Edmund's lament for the Traitor something that came into being this week.
A word about Edmund. I have emphasized his Rat and Crow interest. Further, he has been involved in the more "transactional" and "written" part of the whole Just thing -- treaties, laws, amendments, and so forth. This is a significant part of what legal types do. They do not all go to court and argue things as trial lawyers and barristers. We have not yet seen this part of Edmund in my stories -- his province as adjudicator of the accused. It's coming and here we see that just because I've not written it yet, doesn't mean it's not there and important.
Fleming, by the way, is Ian Fleming, who was part of the BSC and did have some really stupid ideas about crashing planes into the Channel in order to steal Enigma machines off of U-boats. Fleming was originally going to be the one to figure out the Rat and Crow in Susan's last letter to Edmund. I decided relatively recently to have the Colonel be the one who decides to take a look a her letter. Tebbitt's disclosure of her odd rambling and insistence of writing to Edmund was also a relatively recent addition.
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I've given my other comments in my review ... my comments so far, that is. Let me just repeat that I really love this chapter!
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Yes, that's it exactly. It was hard too because given the attraction that also exists in the relationship, and the "pax" they reached, I wanted to keep the support and equilibrium they are both working to maintain. As I posted above, Tebbitt reacts to and treats Susan as an adult woman because that's how she reacts to and treats him. Her small, young frame is dissonant because it does not connect with what he knows of (and has personally experienced with) the woman. I also wanted to convey the idea that as young as she is, and as seemingly fragile at this moment, that there is real strength to her. Lambert observes in Palace Guard that Susan is gentle as tides and tree roots.
This is also the era of substantial women's undergarments giving truly impressive shapes. I figure a young girl could add significant padding to her shape and be very consistent with the fashion.