Chapter 18, Moles in the Garden, Part 2

[rthstewart]

Chapter 18 went up this evening, Moles in the Garden, Part 2.


I killed Guy.  I've actually killed off a number of OCs, but this is the first onscreen one.  Susan's entreaty to Guy that he tell Lambert that she IS coming, that she will see him again, is one of the oldest parts of this story.  So too was Tebbitt's gentle handling of Susan as she rinses away Guy's blood and begins to confuse Narnia and Spare Oom.  The lament and farewell were recent editions, with Edmund's lament for the Traitor something that came into being this week. 

A word about Edmund.  I have emphasized his Rat and Crow interest.  Further, he has been involved in the more "transactional" and "written" part of the whole Just thing -- treaties, laws, amendments, and so forth.  This is a significant part of what legal types do.  They do not all go to court and argue things as trial lawyers and barristers.  We have not yet seen this part of Edmund in my stories -- his province as adjudicator of the accused.  It's coming and here we see that just because I've not written it yet, doesn't mean it's not there and important.

Fleming, by the way, is Ian Fleming, who was part of the BSC and did have some really stupid ideas about crashing planes into the Channel in order to steal Enigma machines off of U-boats.  Fleming was originally going to be the one to figure out the Rat and Crow in Susan's last letter to Edmund.  I decided relatively recently to have the Colonel be the one who decides to take a look a her letter.  Tebbitt's disclosure of her odd rambling and insistence of writing to Edmund was also a relatively recent addition.

Oh, and Gillian?  Your review has created a Thing, now known as "mystically delicious."  It involves chocolate  You will notice the new icon in metonomia 's Live Journal.

Comments

[rthstewart.livejournal.com]

Thanks. As I said above, the conversation between Edmund and Peter is one of those things that never would have survived an editor of original fic, but this is why people read fan fic. The next chapter will include Guy's funeral, so, there will be some Agnes interaction there. She doesn't read family, you know.

As for Fleming's rank, when I researched it (again) last night, it had him starting out at the Lt. rank and moving up to Commander, so I decided to start him more junior. He may be Lt Cmdr at this point, or full Cmdr, but I wasn't sure and just started him more junior. There's that hilarious picture of him by the fireplace in The Irregulars book looking like quite the naval officer.

[autumnia]

I could never ever be an editor if that's the case then. :-) I think I'm glad that Agnes never reads family; it would be sad to know of a prediction in which someone close to you dies in such a horrible manner.

As for "The Irregulars", the photos were fascinating! I admit that men in uniform are certainly quite dashing. Longlea wasn't quite what I expected, and it was nice to put faces next to the names. Oddly, I did like the candid photo of Dahl with Hemingway -- Dahl looked rather handsome in that picture to me.

[lady_songsmith]

I liked that one too. If I could draw people better, I would like to use that shot as a reference for a picture of Peter -- Dahl has about the build I picture an older English Peter having, even if they look nothing alike otherwise.