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rthstewart) wrote2010-02-11 10:19 pm
rthstewart) wrote2010-02-11 10:19 pm
Entry tags:
Towels, Poetry, Rats, Crows, and a Buffalo
Chapter 16 of TQSiT is up, The Rule of Three's
The well-endowed buffalo whose privates were painted red by a Wing Commander:
I had thought of doing Susan and Tebbitt's reconciliation later, but there isn't that much else this very chatty, seemingly not very substantive chapter. Consider it, I suppose, the respite, the lighter calm between the storms of what just happened and what is still to come. Not much left, I think, though the last will likely be in a couple parts.
As expected, between Susan's snogging in Chapter 15 and The Morning After chapter of Harold and Morgan, I lost some readers. I knew it would happen, but didn't alter what I intended to do. Something I have found myself thinking on is how much I like this empowered, adult Susan. I am finding a feminist sensibility, and maybe it's reawakening in me as well. I like a character who has feelings, passions, desires, thoughts, and plans, but whose mature wisdom holds it all in place. I like that she looks and does not act upon her desires because she thinks of consequences, and weighs benefits and costs. In contrast to the go, go, go, full steam ahead of Tebbitt, or Mary Russell from Part 1, or even someone like Lucy (I think), Susan looks before the leap, pauses before the step, and weighs her decisions.
Also, in contrast to the end of Part 1 where after so many chapters I finally began switching to Peter's point of view, here we do the opposite, getting into the heads of Tebbitt and the Colonel (I just can't call him George as in: George considered, George thought. It sounds so lame).
Not a lot, I suppose, though given the 3 feet of snow, over 90 CM, we have had here, any writing at all has been miraculous. The children have been out of school for a week, the government is closed, and the days have constricted to shoveling snow, drying wet clothing, and trying to stay connected to work.
If there are enough, TQSiT will break 300 which just stuns me, but boy, with the weather being what it has been, that would be almost as nice as a weekend in the sunshine.
The well-endowed buffalo whose privates were painted red by a Wing Commander:
I had thought of doing Susan and Tebbitt's reconciliation later, but there isn't that much else this very chatty, seemingly not very substantive chapter. Consider it, I suppose, the respite, the lighter calm between the storms of what just happened and what is still to come. Not much left, I think, though the last will likely be in a couple parts.
As expected, between Susan's snogging in Chapter 15 and The Morning After chapter of Harold and Morgan, I lost some readers. I knew it would happen, but didn't alter what I intended to do. Something I have found myself thinking on is how much I like this empowered, adult Susan. I am finding a feminist sensibility, and maybe it's reawakening in me as well. I like a character who has feelings, passions, desires, thoughts, and plans, but whose mature wisdom holds it all in place. I like that she looks and does not act upon her desires because she thinks of consequences, and weighs benefits and costs. In contrast to the go, go, go, full steam ahead of Tebbitt, or Mary Russell from Part 1, or even someone like Lucy (I think), Susan looks before the leap, pauses before the step, and weighs her decisions.
Also, in contrast to the end of Part 1 where after so many chapters I finally began switching to Peter's point of view, here we do the opposite, getting into the heads of Tebbitt and the Colonel (I just can't call him George as in: George considered, George thought. It sounds so lame).
Not a lot, I suppose, though given the 3 feet of snow, over 90 CM, we have had here, any writing at all has been miraculous. The children have been out of school for a week, the government is closed, and the days have constricted to shoveling snow, drying wet clothing, and trying to stay connected to work.
If there are enough, TQSiT will break 300 which just stuns me, but boy, with the weather being what it has been, that would be almost as nice as a weekend in the sunshine.
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It's a shame you lost some readers, but as you have often reminded us, this isn't your children's Narnia. This is a very adult Narnia that explores mature situations; if one has read the warning, one should have some idea of what to expect.
As I've stated in the past, I love this empowered Susan. We see so many facets to her (as we do with her siblings) and she truly 'lives' here beyond what Lewis has shown us about her personality.
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It's something to think about for Part 3 -- what big reveals there will be, with whom, and how.
As for the lost readership, as I said, it's to be expected though I do wonder if other writers get things like this -- certainly my approach is not utterly unique. Critique and even flames really don't bother me at all, but accusations of immorality, well, that's when I look at it all and think, you know, maybe I should just go to the gym or write an article for work instead. I'll stick with it as long as there those who are interested and as long as I have ideas, I suppose.
And I HATE snow. HATE IT HATE HATE HATE HATE IT
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Ah, I would love if Asim and Richard ever found out the truth. And possibly the Colonel as well. I've wondered a bit if they would all ever end up in the same place (Aslan's Country, Heaven, Paradise) at the end of all things.
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(And don't forget about Susan/Lambert reunion too, though it will be a much longer wait for them than the other monarchs and Guards.)
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(Anonymous) 2011-01-18 09:50 pm (UTC)(link)snigger
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Where is morality, if not in responsibility? Is it truly in blind obedience? I think not.
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Granted, I would prefer that the ladies of the PTA and my neighbors and clients and husband and co-workers not learn of all this fandom stuff. But, yes, in between the cookie baking, crock pot cooking, the homework checking, exercising, walking the dog, tending to work needs as a veteran of the same place of employment since 1994, receiving my first AARP solicitation, and celebrating 20+ years of Christian marriage, I also have time, from about 5:45 to 6:00 AM for immorality.
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...
And now that there has been a mention of the defacing of buffalo, I regret even more my disastrous lack of time.
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I'm saddened for your sake that you lost readers, but selfishly, I wouldn't have you change your writing. You are going somewhere different, and as far as I'm concerned, that sort of original thinking and writing should be celebrated, not condemned.
Just my two cents
Cheers : )
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Yes, right, fan fiction... As I just said to Autumnia and to Miniver, the flames and critiques don't really bother me that much. I'll keep writing, I suppose, so long as there are some who appreciate it.
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(Anonymous) 2010-02-12 06:08 pm (UTC)(link)In my case, at the very least, that's the real reason for my lack of response to this. I do read each thing you put out, but I never find the time to post about my thoughts. Very busy indeed. Hmm, maybe I'm starting to go back to my lurker ways. I shall endeavor to review properly though during the weekend, if time will permit it.
My thoughts on chapters I haven't reviewed yet will be in my actual reviews, don't worry~ :P
- Lhanae
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Free Susan!
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I join those who hope for the main OCs to know the truth.
There are two kinds of OCs in my opinion. There are those that are created because the author likes them and then pushed into the story somehow (the Mary Sues are a prime example of those, but not all of them are Mary Sues).
Then there are those who surround canon characters naturally, and belong in the story. You very easily get those if you develop minor canon characters, like the early history of Caspian IX and his brother Miraz, or one of the seven Lords from Dawn Treader. But you also get them by expanding on the lives of the canon characters, like what you do here with the Pevensies in our world - the people they meet under their new circumstances, like the Russels, or like Tebbit and the Colonel (I prefer him as the Colonel, too). Or like all the Guards back in Narnia.
I prefer the second group to the first - possibly because with the definition I'm using, the likelihood of Mary Sues is that much bigger ...
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This, this, this! It's why I have such love for and take such genuine interest (whether for good or ill!) in so many of your OCs, rth. It's because they started as peripheral beings, merely related to the Main Attraction; only after their introduction did they grow into their own selves and become interesting as a result of this. They are NOT thrust on us by force, as already-accomplished fact, as things we must love because you do too! Rather you introduce them gently, develop them nicely, and I am not at all offended by them. Except when I should be. Teehee.
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It did occur to me as I've been thinking of the next chapter (I'd not intended to pull Asim in so directly to the next chapter, but rather to just cross reference the fact that we are now back to the beginning.) But given that he has seen the "Narnia" in Susan's letter and possibly "Aslan" and now just seen Edmund's telegram -- been to N. Seen A, that he must surely be wondering at the connection this same evening as Peter reads the letters. He will be with Polly and Digory and their elliptical conversation, Polly will have to tell Richard something about why Peter is not there... and... ARGH! I have a whole chapter here!!!
Hmmm. back to thinking.
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We got some snow down here, and it will probably snow again tonight, but not as much as you guys got. Hope you can manage to get back to work and get the kids out of the house soon!
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"A lot of the artifacts here were sent out to people's houses during the war," said a voice fairly close behind her, and Sarah Jane wondered how the woman had got so close without her noticing: the ability of sensing someone approaching had kept her alive (if not out of the hands of captors) for a number of years, after all. The woman continued, unaware of Sarah Jane's self-examination, "I wonder sometimes if that's how this piece slipped in here, if whoever kept the collection it with which it returned lost a memento of their travels."
"I don't think there are many people who could have picked up this as a souvenir," Sarah Jane responded.
"Indeed not." The woman moved from behind Sarah Jane and around the display, so they could see each other over the pedestal. "And not many could recognize it as being from a different world, could they?"
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I'm going to open a new entry for your entry and we shall take it from there! You are so very kind! Thank you!
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