I've not read The Eagle or Boys Own, but yes, I think it is clearer in context but Peter is there, sitting in the barracks -- a Private in Lt. Brotheridge's platoon. (He was busted from Lance Corporal to Private for an Incident). They are all smoking and polishing boots after having gone through the exercise that General Gale gave them. This is right before their CO gets the - partial- D-Day orders. I wish I knew when they started describing it as THE D-Day -- since all operations have a D-Day -- when did Normandy become THE D-Day because I was wondering if before they knew of it -- knew that 160,000 men would be storming 5 beaches and gliding and dropping behind lines -- if they referred to it as D-Day then.
Also, something that has ended up working well -- several people have told me that Peter as written (public school, the Professor, Oxbridge) would/should be in OTC. I took him out of that, in part because of the timing -- it's all taking so long. Also I didn't want to insert another officer into the Ox & Bucks D Company since, you know, they're all FAMOUS. It would be too much like adding a 10th member of the Fellowship, but IN REAL LIFE. So, I decided to push him in with the NCOs (ROs?) -- enlisted men. And actually, that's working very well. They are very colorful characters, they DO lots of cool stuff, and it's very much where I wanted his character to go anyway -- the High King become the "man of the people." It's really working. What that means though is that I'm trying to make it rougher the longer he is with D Company. This point quoted above is a year in and I want Peter to come across as less of the "public school girl" (or some other effeminate, high class epithets that the Cockneys and working class Londoners would level at him). It's not that he was much of that way before but he comes as High King and Oxbridge-bound and now he's in with the commoners. There's a class and language thing going on here that I want to get across that, as an American, is really foreign. Anyway, when I'm ready for a beta, I'll be looking for help to make sure I've got this.
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Also, something that has ended up working well -- several people have told me that Peter as written (public school, the Professor, Oxbridge) would/should be in OTC. I took him out of that, in part because of the timing -- it's all taking so long. Also I didn't want to insert another officer into the Ox & Bucks D Company since, you know, they're all FAMOUS. It would be too much like adding a 10th member of the Fellowship, but IN REAL LIFE. So, I decided to push him in with the NCOs (ROs?) -- enlisted men. And actually, that's working very well. They are very colorful characters, they DO lots of cool stuff, and it's very much where I wanted his character to go anyway -- the High King become the "man of the people." It's really working. What that means though is that I'm trying to make it rougher the longer he is with D Company. This point quoted above is a year in and I want Peter to come across as less of the "public school girl" (or some other effeminate, high class epithets that the Cockneys and working class Londoners would level at him). It's not that he was much of that way before but he comes as High King and Oxbridge-bound and now he's in with the commoners. There's a class and language thing going on here that I want to get across that, as an American, is really foreign. Anyway, when I'm ready for a beta, I'll be looking for help to make sure I've got this.