The new chapter had to wait printed for a whole week until I finally had a chance to read it with attention it deserves. The only consolation of this sorry situation is that I will have a week less to wait for a next chapter... But here I am, ready to tell you what I think about all that. First: Russell House. Good to be there once again. I love the ambience. And I like how Jill suited there perfectly well. Second: Polly Plummer. Very professional investigation. No doubts we’re in the country of Sherlock Holmes... Third: Jill. I must admit that I don’t remember much about her from the books. Chronicles of Narnia were my favorite books when I was 8-9 years old. When Eustace and Jill replaced Pevensie children as main characters I simply took umbrage at them and all the books which were not about Pevensies and was reading only those with PSEL. As a result I can still quote parts of LWW or PC, but I remember hardly anything from SCh. Nonetheless, Jill which you created (there is so little about her in books that we may say that this one is your creation) is a person I really like despite my old prejudice. What is rare, my first thought was that I like her not as a book character, but as a person - I believe her consideration for Richard is to be blamed for that. Her attitude towards him is really charming. Such a simple, but intelligent kindness. I must say that at first I was a bit skeptical about making her half-black - I thought it’s a bit too much of a coincidence considering your interest in a topic of non-whites in Britain and multicultural Russell Household. Yet, in this chapter I bought it easily. But if you would write: "Oh look, an African girl!" I would throw all the pages with your story printed and never come back to it again. Luckily it was subtle enough for me to swallow. But I declare, that if you’ll listen to some of your readers and “ship” Jill with Peter I will take the first plane to USA and bash you in your head. Really, we have enough maritime stories in the fandom, don’t turn yours into one [*maritime story - story which can be fully described by information who is shipped with whom]. Anyway, they all die young so they won’t have much time for romantics. Good for me! One general thought: your chapters are too short. I don’t know if that’s only me, but after ending each chapter my first thought is “Wait... Where’s the rest of it?”. I do understand that it’s a problem of having many characters without labeling few of them as “main”. But I really wouldn’t mind reading about Jill’s interaction with Kun and Lee. Waiting for a Return of the (High) King. Hope you won’t make us wait too long. Krystyna
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But here I am, ready to tell you what I think about all that.
First: Russell House. Good to be there once again. I love the ambience. And I like how Jill suited there perfectly well.
Second: Polly Plummer. Very professional investigation. No doubts we’re in the country of Sherlock Holmes...
Third: Jill. I must admit that I don’t remember much about her from the books. Chronicles of Narnia were my favorite books when I was 8-9 years old. When Eustace and Jill replaced Pevensie children as main characters I simply took umbrage at them and all the books which were not about Pevensies and was reading only those with PSEL. As a result I can still quote parts of LWW or PC, but I remember hardly anything from SCh. Nonetheless, Jill which you created (there is so little about her in books that we may say that this one is your creation) is a person I really like despite my old prejudice. What is rare, my first thought was that I like her not as a book character, but as a person - I believe her consideration for Richard is to be blamed for that. Her attitude towards him is really charming. Such a simple, but intelligent kindness.
I must say that at first I was a bit skeptical about making her half-black - I thought it’s a bit too much of a coincidence considering your interest in a topic of non-whites in Britain and multicultural Russell Household. Yet, in this chapter I bought it easily. But if you would write: "Oh look, an African girl!" I would throw all the pages with your story printed and never come back to it again. Luckily it was subtle enough for me to swallow. But I declare, that if you’ll listen to some of your readers and “ship” Jill with Peter I will take the first plane to USA and bash you in your head. Really, we have enough maritime stories in the fandom, don’t turn yours into one [*maritime story - story which can be fully described by information who is shipped with whom]. Anyway, they all die young so they won’t have much time for romantics. Good for me!
One general thought: your chapters are too short. I don’t know if that’s only me, but after ending each chapter my first thought is “Wait... Where’s the rest of it?”. I do understand that it’s a problem of having many characters without labeling few of them as “main”. But I really wouldn’t mind reading about Jill’s interaction with Kun and Lee.
Waiting for a Return of the (High) King. Hope you won’t make us wait too long.
Krystyna