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rthstewart) wrote2011-09-07 10:28 am
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NFE Reveals
So,
snacky and
caramelsilver have run the best NFE ever, with terrific fic and wow, what a roller coaster. The reveals and full story summary are up
I am the greatest anon fail ever, and I will post more later, but suffice to say:
I am
jess_in_time and wrote Food for Thought which is written as a series of Live Journal entries, complete with attempts at teen slang and extensive visuals.
I also wrote the last story that went up yesterday, for
anastigmatfic, I love not man the less but nature more. You can also read it here
I owe a huge number of thank yous and research notes and yeah, some meta too as this is the so-called "kingmaking" story and that I have been meaning to do for years. It was a really personal and emotional thing for me to complete that story and enormous challenge. More later on that.
There is lovely work here in the NFE. Please go read and review the stories presented. A special thanks to
bedlamsbard for her story to me, Written in the Dust.
LJ is also screwing with user names again. Every time I click on the edit button, it starts moving names around.
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I am the greatest anon fail ever, and I will post more later, but suffice to say:
I am
![[livejournal.com profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/external/lj-userinfo.gif)
I also wrote the last story that went up yesterday, for
![[livejournal.com profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/external/lj-userinfo.gif)
There is lovely work here in the NFE. Please go read and review the stories presented. A special thanks to
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The Revels and everything else
With Susan, such a lovely hint of sensuality when Lucy observes touches that she was fairly certain were considered improper in that other place. It matched so perfectly the point at which you'd established Susan- not wanting the Revels, *yet*. But realizing that she will want such things soon. And I love that she doesn't bother with the laces on the way back, showing that her feelings on such things have changed.
With Peter, such a great job showing his reluctance and confusion but also the determination to do right by his land and his subjects that is so fundamental to his character. Your description of his encounter with the hesitant Satyr was perfect, and really quite hot. Brief allusions sometimes work better than long, involved descriptions. And in particular, the last line describing Peter at the Revels was wonderfully evocative without getting too explicit. Not that I'd object to the porn-tastic version of that scene, but it would not have fit with the rest of the story at all. What you wrote did.
Other high points: Edmund understanding, in his intellectual way, that he and Lucy have become more comfortable, and Peter needs that acceptance that he can readily provide (and, due to the societal problems specific to male homosexuality, Susan and Lucy cannot).
Also, Lucy's thorough identification as a Narnian due to her young age. So much of her later character in your universe flows from her core personality being formed under Narnian rules. Edmund to some degree as well, but his intellectual nature causes him to internalize it differently (and great to see him and Lucy discuss that).
Well done!
-H
Re: The Revels and everything else